Thread:Shado supreme/@comment-25600892-20180308232135/@comment-26059868-20180426174742

Ah. Ok. That clears things up a bit.

Ever heard the saying, "Try to write for everyone and you end up writing for no one"?

Right now, your story is like something you'd find maybe a 5-7 year old reading; not too complicated, a positive and easy to spot moral lesson, and a simple, straightforward plot.

But me, a 16 year old, who's taken several writing classes, read more fanfictions than I can remember, and in general spend lots of my free time learning about the intricacies of writing, find your story, well, to put it simply: Short and boring.

But's thats just my opinion. If this is the kind of story you like to write, well, keep doing it. The second part to the quote up there is, "Write the stories you would want to read, and hope that people enjoy them".