Thread:Shado supreme/@comment-25600892-20180508222738/@comment-26059868-20180604180912

Just go into more detail.

Tell it from William's perspective. Describe the horror and fear he must be feeling, seeing his comrades crushed around him a giant mechanical monstrousity.

Then switch to Soundwave's perspective, make him look down upon the human's pitiful weaponry. Describe him hearing the screech of incoming missiles, only to scramble their guidance systems and make them miss.

An action scene should just be a few lines of text. It should be whole paragraphs, telling what the characters are thinking and feeling, how they're struggling to overcome the situation, why they don't want to lose.